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04-06-2008

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Originally Posted by Upside

alright can use guys just proof read it. it is worth like 100 marks so it is pretty big

Final Reading log
By Craig Hartley

In my opinion Fight Club was an amazing book, the plot was really good and it always had the perfect twist at the perfect time. The book describes the Characters in an original, but it is easy to get a picture of them your head. There were only a few thing that did not work out like the ending “Chuck Palahniuk(Page 208) because every once in a while, somebody brings me my lunch tray and my meds and he has a black eye or his forehead is swollen with stitches ,and he says “We miss you Mr. Durden.” Which totally leaves it open and can be very confusing. Also at every new chapter it can be confusing because it seems to make a new point every time or almost a new story. It is like the whole story was written by two or three different authors and put the story together almost like a puzzle. One more thing is that the main character and the person who is his sidekick is the same person which you don’t learn from the begging. The setting also plays a big part in this book it makes it seem more real and almost you can feel like you’re a part of fight club or project mayhem. All around I thought it was an amazing book and I would love to read a second one if it would come out.

Bold #1: This sentence does not make any sense. Try re-wording.

Bold #2: Begging = beginning?

Bold #3: Try re-wording this sentence. Example: The setting plays a very important role in this novel. The descriptions of the setting puts a very distinct picture in your head, almost making you feel like you are side-by-side with Tyler Durden in Project Mayhem.

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There is more that can be worked on, but I need to shower up before work so I just picked out 3 big things that stood out for me.