Originally Posted by Whitewater

Bold #1: This sentence does not make any sense. Try re-wording.

Bold #2: Begging = beginning?

Bold #3: Try re-wording this sentence. Example: The setting plays a very important role in this novel. The descriptions of the setting puts a very distinct picture in your head, almost making you feel like you are side-by-side with Tyler Durden in Project Mayhem.

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There is more that can be worked on, but I need to shower up before work so I just picked out 3 big things that stood out for me.